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Finding a Character's Voice

4/1/2025

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What makes each character in a story shine? In part, it’s their voice. Voice is how characters wield dialogue, and it should be supported by the narrative. When reading a character’s internal thoughts or dialogue, we should recognise them. Their voice should be distinct not only from the other characters, but also from the author’s voice. 

When faced with someone playing their music too loud, one character says, “Would you mind turning that down a little please?” While a different character shouts, “If you don’t turn that shit down right now, I’ll fucking do it for you!” Straight away, we can differentiate the characters and not only surmise something about each of them but also about their relationship with the person playing the music. These characters employ their dialogue in very different ways — one polite, the other aggressive.

It's obvious that a cleaner on a generational spaceship woken from cryo-sleep to clean up after a bloody coup will speak in a very different way to a witch offering a potion to a lovelorn knight. The differences will exceed their locations, languages and accents. Almost everything will be different: the tone, urgency and rhythm of their speech; the vocabulary they use; the structure of their sentences. But what if it’s two cleaners woken from cryo-sleep? How can their voices be distinct?

The background of a character should be reflected in their voice. Their age, gender, culture, and education will influence their word choice. Think about the way older men often interrupt and speak over young women. The vocabulary of working-class people shouldn’t be simplified or dumbed down — but it should be used differently to upper management and company owners. In the same way, racist tropes should be avoided. It’s enough to say ‘She spoke with a French accent’, rather than…ow you say?…err…to write in ze way she en fait speaks…bah dis donc!

The temperament of a character influences not only the words they use, but the way they deliver those words. When they get angry do they shout and annunciate every single word? Perhaps they stutter when nervous or afraid? Much is revealed about a character by their tone of voice — are they arrogant or timid by nature? What happens when a character finds themselves outside their comfort zone? Do they talk more or go quiet? Are their sentences shorter or do their sentences trail off to silence? All of this tells us something about the character and sets them apart from the crowd.

Turns of phrase, tics, and slang are very effective in distinguishing characters, but they should be used judiciously and not over laboured. The same applies to habitually mispronouncing words. I once had a conversation with a woman who talked about visiting the ‘gully’ on an airplane, it took me a while to figure out she meant the ‘galley’. The same woman was someone who if a sentence only needed ten words, then she’d use thirty. If I was to write her as a character, the obvious foil to her verbosity would be to have a character who only spoke in clipped sentences, grunted or used gruff words.

Describing a character’s body language through narrative is another way of distinguishing their voice. Do their emotions play out on their face or are they unreadable? How a character walks and moves can tell us a lot about them and can differentiate them from other similar characters. Another physical attribute that distinguishes a character is their speaking voice. Is it low or high-pitched, raspy, booming or soft? The discordance of a character’s speaking voice being at odds with their physical appearance creates a unique and memorable character.
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Every character, even minor ones, should have their own voice. One of the best ways to research character’s voices is to people watch. Sit in a café or a park or wherever people congregate and pay active attention to the conversations around you. Take notes.
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Why Write Novellas?

3/2/2025

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In the 11 years I’ve been writing fiction, I’ve only completed one full length novel. The two others I started sit stranded at around 30,000 words — the characters fated to remain frozen mid-action surrounded by the crumbling facades of my world-building. I just can’t muster the commitment needed to revitalise them. Yet, in those same 11 years, I’ve written a multitude of short stories, numerous poems and seven novellas.

When setting out to write the Ghost Assassins of Bijou series. I made the deliberate choice to write them as novellas. Each of the five stories are between 22-29K words in length, so roughly 100 pages in book form with a reading time of 2 - 4 hours. While each novella stands alone, as a series, they read as a layered and complex novel.

In a 2014 essay, Allan Gurganus said, “A novella, containing the best of poem and novel, gives us the whiplash of one and echoes of the other.” I find beauty in the stark brevity of novellas and prefer the sharp stab of emotion to the drawn-out torment of longer-form novels. Then again, I also rip off plasters and dive into freezing water…so my reading preferences reflect my life-style perversities.

When I consider my favourite reads from the last few years many of them are novellas:
To Be Taught if Fortunate by Becky Chambers
This is How You Lose the Time War by Amal El-Mohtar and Max Gladstone
All Systems Red by Martha Wells
Binti by Nnedi Okorafor

None of this is to say that I don’t like reading novels or even sagas, I do, but I prefer the shorter form. I’d rather read a series of short books set in the same world / universe, than a seemingly endless saga rolled into an enormous single offering. I’m easily bored and often skim-read large swathes of a saga to leap from one action scene to the next. Whereas, I'll cling to every nuance and word of a well-crafted and perfectly formed novella.

As a writer, the novella has given me the freedom to be innovative in how I use words to create emotions and responses. In the Ghost Assassins of Bijou novellas, I’ve made use of songs and haiku to invoke a sharper emotional response than could be achieved with even the most beautifully crafted paragraphs of prose and dialogue. I've also experimented with different points of view.

I don’t consciously follow formats such as the Hero’s Journey or the 3-Act Structure when I’m writing a novella. This doesn’t mean there isn’t a flow to the storyline or a lack of tension, it just means the points of high emotion, high tension and relief occur organically and often in ways that aren’t expected or anticipated. When read as a series, the high points hit differently.

Like Martha Wells’ Murderbot Diaries and Nnedi Okorafor’s Binti Trilogy, the Ghost Assassins of Bijou is a series of novellas. In this way the series offers the complexity of a novel — deep world-building enriched by multiple points of view and subplots weaving through an overarching storyline — with the artistry of a poem.

Novellas offer a deeper exploration than a short story, while being more focussed than a novel. Our minds are busy, and our senses overwhelmed. Every day we’re assailed by an avalanche of unfettered information that we must critically assess to determine what's true, what's important, and what's critical. When I read a book, I want to escape and be distracted from the horrors and mundanities of our increasingly dystopian world.

So, when I write a book, I write it for me. And this is why I write novellas.
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Monsters From the Deep

10/31/2024

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In the antipodes, Halloween is out of season, it’s spring here and all about rebirth and hope. So rather than talk about spooky things, this month I’ve mixed my interests in monsters and marine critters to talk about monsters from the deep.
 
As I’ve been writing the initial five Ghost Assassins of Bijou novellas, I’ve leaned into my training and expertise as a marine biologist. Bijou is a marine planet, with an equatorial archipelago of extinct volcanic islands making up the minor terrestrial habitat. Much like we Earthlings, the human inhabitants of Bijou are limited to the land and the coastal fringes and surface of the ocean. As the stories have progressed, it’s become obvious that, also like us, the human residents of Bijou know next to nothing about most of their planet. Unlike us, however, they do have relationships with the sentient inhabitants of their ocean—especially with the belosa, a cuttlefish-like creature, some of whom choose to be living spaceships for the ghost assassins.
 
I could have created an entirely new creature to fill this role, but the shape and motion of cuttlefish lends them beautifully to being spaceships. They’re also intelligent, have distinct methods of communication and are well studied. This made it (relatively) easy to take an extant creature and develop it into one of science fiction. And there’s so much more life in the depths that we can use in this way.
 
The deep sea is Earth’s largest habitat, offering a massive 97% of the habitable space available to life on our planet. Which is remarkable, given how little we know of the lives and range of creatures that exist there. It’s estimated that we know less than 10% of the existing species of the deep sea. What monsters lurk beyond our reach and understanding?
 
Let’s set the scene in our search for monsters from the deep.
The deep sea is defined as beyond the reach of light, on average this happens at around 200m of depth. No plants live beyond this depth. The water is cold (~2°C), and the pressures are immense (an additional atmosphere of pressure for every 10m of depth). Around 70% of the sea floor is abyssal plains, but there are a multitude of other habitats including: seamounts, canyons, troughs, ridges, cold seeps, hydrothermal vents, polymetallic nodule fields, and asphalt fields or brine pools. Life in these habitats requires extreme (to us) adaptations.
 
Many animals at these depths have foregone the need to move. Why waste energy on locomotion when the food comes to you? Others have abandoned the sun as their source of energy and rely instead on the energy contained in inorganic chemicals that leach through Earth’s crust at vents and seeps. Oxygen isn’t always required, and life has found ways to exist in extremes that should kill. Creatures are diverse, often long-lived, and can be surprisingly large.
 
Onto the monsters!
Let’s start with Cnidarians (the C is silent)—jellyfish, corals, anemones and hydroids.  These creatures have a mouth that also serves as their anus, they also have muscles, reproductive organs and tentacles. Already so much fun. But best of all, they kill with an explosion of tiny poison-tipped harpoons. Imagine visiting a strange planet, where simply brushing past a delicate feather-like shrub results in your body being swamped with a neurotoxin that stops your heart. The feathers wrap around you and the creature spends the next century feasting on your remains. Or your spaceship emerges from hyper-drive into the slow drifting tentacles of a massive space-jelly. There is no escape. Death is slow in the gut sac behind the creature’s dual-function mouth/arse—but it’s inevitable.
 
I’m not going to bother talking about marine worms, because…well…Dune. We all know what that looks like. All I’ll add is that the penis worm doesn’t hunt—it waits. To capture passing soldiers, the penis worm vomits out its toothed throat then retracts it, dragging the flailing prey with it. Death by penis worm—so noble.
 
Molluscs include a wide variety of life-forms including snails (gastropods); clams (bivalves); chitons; and squids (cephalopods). This group is rich pickings for premade monsters filled as it is with active predators armed with deadly toxins, camouflage and more terrifying tentacles. Probably the most frightening thing about molluscs is the weird feeding organ they all possess. It’s called a radula, a movable belt covered with teeth. The radula can scrape flesh from bones, drill holes in the hulls of space stations and inject toxins into unwary interplanetary explorers. Abandon all hope, weary travellers.
 
Crustaceans are equipped with many limbs. So many limbs. Delicate antennae that detect movement, taste, electrical currents to focus the hunt. Legs and more legs enable them to skitter over the barriers protecting a newly established colony. They swim through space and time using the oar-like appendages under their tails. Hidden beneath desert sands, they’ll spy on you with stalked eyes, then snap you up with claws and pincers that hold, slice and dice. Some of them move so fast they can teleport. You’ll never see the parasite before it steals your body for its own purposes—leaving you a more witless zombie than usual.
 
Next on our list of monsters from the deep are the armoured echinoderms—starfish, sea cucumbers, urchins, brittle stars, crinoids and the like—distinct in the animal world with their 5-sided symmetry. Ravenous and relentless they glide across the vast freeze-dried plains on hydrostatic tube feet. They’re impervious to your weapons. When they catch you—and they will catch you—they’ll hover over your trapped body and extrude their stomach out through their mouth. Once you’re digested, they draw their stomach inside and glide away. Behind them, the hollow husk of your once perfect body wafts in the currents of an alien breeze.
 
When you stare out at the night sky, filled with stars and mysteries, some of those stars aren’t what you think they are. Giant angler fish drift the universe on cosmic tides, their bodies invisible against the blackness of the void. Some of those distant stars are bioluminescent lures, hung out to draw in unsuspecting colonists searching for planets within the Goldilocks range. Once the unspeakably enormous maw closes its needled teeth around your interstellar generation-ship, the lights wink out—forever.
 
If, these macro monsters don’t offer you the perfect character for your next space horror…then what about the dangers of the micro monsters of the deep. Imagine bacteria that deplete the sulphur in your skin, leaving you with lesions that can’t heal and a compromised metabolism. Maybe the archaea in your gut are replaced by those that feed on, rather than produce, the methane you require for digestion? Deep sea viruses are more likely to be lysogenic, meaning they replace sections of your DNA with their own to reprogramme your metabolism for their own needs and they need to be cold…so very, very cold.
 
Honestly, I could write so much more but I think I’ve made my point. There’s no need to reinvent biology in the search for monsters. The way I imagine and extrapolate monsters from living creatures is, if it can swim it can probably also fly, if it can live in the dark expanse of the ocean, it’ll do just fine in space and if it’s small it can become very, very big.
 
Need more inspiration? Then, let your fingers lead you down a penis wormhole of online research. Or head to your local library and flick through any number of books about sea life (because it lives in my bookshelf, I referred to Peter Batson’s 2003 edition of, Deep New Zealand: Blue Water, Black Abyss, in my research for this blog). Finally, if you enjoy a field trip head to your nearest aquarium or marine research lab on an open day.

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Memory, Self and Character Arcs

10/1/2024

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One of my recent characters was the recipient of the memories of others. She had trouble distinguishing her own memories from those that weren’t her own. At times, she questioned who she was and struggled with her new identity.

So, to inform my writing, I spent some time reading and thinking about memory and the self. 
We rely heavily on our memories to tell us who we are, but there are some problems with that. Memories aren’t reliable and even if we think they are, they can only tell us who we were.

[Disclaimer: None of my musings consider the impact of brain injuries or disease on a person’s memory and sense of self. While both of those exist in my family, the following is based on my personal experience with my own memories and what they mean to my sense of self.]

I’ve got clear memories of events from my childhood that I just didn’t experience. What I actually have of those events are photographs and stories told over and over by my parents. So, I know that, for me, all it takes to construct a false memory is a visual cue and a good story.

At the other end of my memory spectrum, I’ve got massive gaps. I ran into a friend a while ago and they were recounting something we’d shared that had a profound impact on their life. I have zero recollection of whatever it was, even now after they reminded me…it’s a gigantic black hole. It was awful, and it hurt their feelings that I couldn’t remember.

I think because I’m a visual learner unless there’s a visual reminder, or a powerful emotional connection to the moment, event or activity, then it just doesn’t stick. So, if I’m the just sum of my memories then, at best, I’m a patchwork of half-truths and gaping holes. Surely, I’m more than that?

One thing I’m certain of is that I’ve occupied this body through everything. I know it well and can point to every scar and tell you where I was and what happened. This body hasn’t always served me well—my periods were debilitating, and the night-sweats of perimenopause made me question my will to live—but it’s mine. Isn’t it?

It turns out it’s not. By this point in my life, every cell I was born with has been replaced around eight times. This is not the same body that learned to swim in a tidal channel on the mudflats. It’s not the same body that lost its virginity on a picnic blanket under a grapefruit tree. It’s not even the same body that danced under a glacier in Antarctica. I don’t possess the same body I was born into, but the elements remain.

So, am I just a bunch of memories that can’t be trusted and a body that’s changed beyond recognition? Of course not. I’m so much more.

I’m also the product of an accident of birth. Born into a skin, culture, country and time that affords me advantages so many others don’t have. But I’m of a sex that came with hidden challenges. I’m driven by ever-changing goals, fuelled by unstable emotions, and a dynamic set of beliefs and values. I’m the forever-fluid shape of all of those things and more—a package consisting of constant change and potential.

Human beings, along with all living beings, are not static. Even rocks change over time!

How does this apply to writing? 

The characters we write should change across the trajectory of even the shortest story. Their memories should be questionable and their bodies and minds messy with scars both literal and metaphorical.

Newton’s Third Law of Motion states that for every action, there must be an equal and opposite reaction. This principle is useful in developing characters. If a character experiences great pain, then they should become averse to painful situations. If a character finds unbridled joy, then they must also suffer the depths of despair. We need to write these reactions into the character to show how they evolve.

We must allow our characters to grow, or even diminish. Not everyone becomes a better person. Some people thrive in adversity, while others collapse. Our characters should question themselves. What they need from the world should change as the story progresses. The character in the first sentence, should not be the same as the character in the last sentence and we should understand why.
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My character, the one who spawned this existential exploration of self, changed enormously over the arc of the story. She had to. Even though she struggles to manage the multitude of ‘other’ memories, she’s retained her sense of self. At the end of the story, she’s both physically and mentally altered and is still grappling with those changes. She's not a better person, nor is she worse but she's different. Despite the changes, she remains unique and distinct from the other characters, and most important, we still recognise her. 
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Advice for New Writers

8/31/2024

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I know what it’s like. You have a book inside you. It’s burning to get out. So, you write it. Your family and your best friend love it. It’s the best story ever written. It’ll be a best-seller and made into a film. A famous actor will play the lead and become your new best friend. You’ll buy a mansion and travel first class. The world will be your oyster…

If only publishers and agents would stop ignoring your emails.
If only publishers and agents would stop rejecting your 185,000-word manuscript.
If only you could afford another $5,000, so the hybrid publisher, who approached you, can publicise it.
If only someone would buy your self-published book with the home-made cover.
 
Where did it all go wrong? You cry.

Probably at the very beginning!
Here’s some lessons I've learned during my writing practice - some the hard way, others through the generous advice of fellow authors.
  1. Join an organisation dedicated to writers. It might be a regional or national group, like Writers Victoria in Australia or New Zealand’s Society of Authors (NZSA). Or maybe a specialised group like SpecFicNZ, for writers of speculative fiction, or HWA, for those who write horror. If that’s too much, see if you can find a local group of writers who meet in person. All of these will provide various levels of support, advice and training to assist you on your writing journey.
  2. Take advantage of in-person and online workshops and seminars to learn about craft and the publishing world. These are also opportunities to make connections with like-minded authors.
  3. Find a critique group. Friends and family don’t want to hurt your feelings or crush your dreams. Other writers will give you honest feedback on all aspects of your writing (grammar, plot, characters, voice etc). This should be a two-way exchange; you help them, they help you. Everyone learns and grows.
  4. Pay for a professional editor. Unless you have mad editing skills, it’s almost impossible to pick up your own mistakes. If you can’t afford to pay, then at the very least, buy a great self-editing guide and work your way through it with rigour. My suggestions are: Mark My Words by Lee Murray and Angela Yuriko Smith, and; Self-Editing For Fiction Writers by Browne and King.
  5. Do your research. This applies to every aspect of your writing life. Research your genre - understand the tropes, expected length, style of cover. Research your market - who’s your audience (age, sex), what makes your story stand out from the crowd. Research agents and publishers who might be interested in your work - read their requirements carefully and follow them to the letter.
 
If you can’t find answers or still have questions, then ask for help from the contacts you’ve made. But and this is important, be respectful of their time. If they say no, be gracious and move on. It’s hard when you don’t know what you don’t know, and we all make mistakes. The trick is to know when to take a pause, set your ego aside and learn.
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